Cliche love poem, "the day"

the day i have to leave you
was the day i lose you
the day we cry upon each other shoulder
was the day we know we can never be together
the day our hands slip away
was the day we had no more say
the day we cry before we splits
was the day i know tomarrow you're only his
the day we had no more promise
was everyday now on i know i will miss

1. how can i improve it?
2. anything else i need to add?

A Time My World Changed, "last day"

it's 2 o'clock
and i haven't arrived
all morning long
i fill my stomach with nasty alcohol
that stings my tongue
down my stomach to my throat
i swallow
gob by gob
untill i reach the point
where my head starts to spin
my eyes were so red
it look like a pink eye
throughout the night
i cry
yesterday was our last day
today is her wedding day
and now there's nothing to say

1. do you understand the meaning of my poem?
2. how can i make it more understandable?